just a few things that cought my eye

just a few things that cought my eye:
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Posted by observer on October 1, 2000 at 07:47:17:

In Reply to: Shokai, please read. posted by Ganteron on September 30, 2000 at 22:29:00:

Your description and role might have been better if you only didn't use all of those short sentences.. I mean.. it is like.. "he has brown eyes. his face is fair. he looks determined.." it doesn't look all that good.. try to put more.. erm, atributes to it, so it will come out like longer sentences, and it will be better i think.

as for shokai.. i have had a couple of clerics under him, and never had a problem with the time it took to get empowered. though, if you don't have time to wait for your lord to answer your prayers, i strongly advise you against playing one of the cleric classees, especially not paladins.

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This is all I wanted, constructive crit. Thank you, observer.n/t Ganteron 07:59:53 10/1/2000 (0)

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Comments:	> Your description and role might have been better if you only didn't use all of those short sentences.. I mean.. it is like.. "he has brown eyes. his face is fair. he looks determined.." it doesn't look all that good.. try to put more.. erm, atributes to it, so it will come out like longer sentences, and it will be better i think. > as for shokai.. i have had a couple of clerics under him, and never had a problem with the time it took to get empowered. though, if you don't have time to wait for your lord to answer your prayers, i strongly advise you against playing one of the cleric classees, especially not paladins.